Thursday, April 9, 2009
Wednesday, March 18, 2009
Editorial peer edits
Paul:
1. Is there a clear point of view? (position)
Jordan:
1. Is there a clear point of view? (position)
- Yes
- Problem is stated clearly, could have been a little more detailed with the solution
- NO
- yes, brings in music fans, consumers, and sellers.
- yes
- Yes, very well developed
- absolutely, it flowed very nicely and kept me interested
Jordan:
1. Is there a clear point of view? (position)
- Yes, he wants the rules to go back to the old rules (five years ago).
2. Does the Op-Ed state the problem and solution simply?
- States the problem very clear, although a solution was never really generated
3. Does the piece address the counter arguments?
- No it does not
4. Is the Op-Ed interesting?
- Not for me since I'm not into basketball...? If I liked basketball I'm sure it would be an interesting topic
5. Are the paragraphs organized logically?
- Yes
6. Does each paragraph develop an idea to support the thesis?
- Everything goes together, although the thesis could have been a little more clear
7. Is the writing clear?
- The writing is very non-chalant and conversational. It would be more clear if it was structured more and had more 'flow' to it.
Tuesday, March 17, 2009
Editorial (350+)
How much of something can really effect your life? Something the size of a mustard seed? -smaller. The size of …. punctuation? -smaller! How can smaller that’s so small have such a huge effect on everyone? Yes, everyone!
If someone knew the cure for cancer, Parkinson’s disease, Alzheimer’s, or diabetes, you would want them to share their antidote, right?
Well it’s possible! Something that’s so small, approximately 30 cells, has a chance of getting us one step closer to curing incurable diseases.
By researching stem cells, specifically embryonic stem cells, we have the capability to derive and regenerate any type of cell and it’s function within the body. Although, we have to be careful and keep in mind the concerns of ethics, because of the use of human embryos.
Just recently, President Barack Obama approved a senate bill removing restrictions that were placed on federal funding for stem cell lines. These restrictions were enforced my former President George W. Bush. These restrictions included prohibiting federal funds for research in which human embryos were created, destroyed, or discarded. -Former President George W. Bush did allow federal funding of embryonic stem cells for research up until the very day the restrictions were imposed , but still limiting researchers to only 21 lines.
Even though researchers have been limited to the 21 lines, Bush never imposed segregating the federally funded and the private funded labs; if he would have the cost would have sky rocketed and slowed down productiveness, but made government laws easier to follow.
With the amount of research that our country has compared to others, we are behind significantly. We must learn from other faster progressing countries and try to catch up with the rest of the world.
There are so many potential embryos that are either being unused, thrown-away, or frozen to help research. Instead of wasting these precious resources, we can take these excess cells and use them as research.
The research we do is the math and formulas that we create for the future. The research that we on embryonic stem cells now, is the ‘future medicine.’
If someone knew the cure for cancer, Parkinson’s disease, Alzheimer’s, or diabetes, you would want them to share their antidote, right?
Well it’s possible! Something that’s so small, approximately 30 cells, has a chance of getting us one step closer to curing incurable diseases.
By researching stem cells, specifically embryonic stem cells, we have the capability to derive and regenerate any type of cell and it’s function within the body. Although, we have to be careful and keep in mind the concerns of ethics, because of the use of human embryos.
Just recently, President Barack Obama approved a senate bill removing restrictions that were placed on federal funding for stem cell lines. These restrictions were enforced my former President George W. Bush. These restrictions included prohibiting federal funds for research in which human embryos were created, destroyed, or discarded. -Former President George W. Bush did allow federal funding of embryonic stem cells for research up until the very day the restrictions were imposed , but still limiting researchers to only 21 lines.
Even though researchers have been limited to the 21 lines, Bush never imposed segregating the federally funded and the private funded labs; if he would have the cost would have sky rocketed and slowed down productiveness, but made government laws easier to follow.
With the amount of research that our country has compared to others, we are behind significantly. We must learn from other faster progressing countries and try to catch up with the rest of the world.
There are so many potential embryos that are either being unused, thrown-away, or frozen to help research. Instead of wasting these precious resources, we can take these excess cells and use them as research.
The research we do is the math and formulas that we create for the future. The research that we on embryonic stem cells now, is the ‘future medicine.’
Monday, March 16, 2009
Editorial outline
1. What is a problem/issue that our entire student body (our school, community, country, etc.) faces today?
- Everyone is affected by a disease that has the potential to be cured by stem cell
- Pro-Research for embryonic stem cells/stem cells in general
- to express the need and the validity for stem cell research
- simplicity of stem cell alone
- cures for uncurable diseases
- future medicine
- our country is behind on research than other countries
- include a touching story in the begining
- to maybe even have people donate and do something about the issue, at least have people change their mind about the issue and have more concern for the future
Peer Edits (feature story) - absent
Alaina
1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
Julia
1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
- I think introducing the topic a little more cleary about growing up earlier on in the story would help it flow better, becuase or else it makes the reader wondering TOO much.
- Yes, the lead involves me. It gets me looking back at my previous years.
- Yes, I can picture the nerf-gun war going on.
- the question I would like to have answered is what is she going to do now? Like to hear more about current stress and situation.
Julia
1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
- Everything seems to be covered really well.
- Yes, the story targets me, a senior in HS awaiting and worrying about college.
- Yes, it may not be a scene, but it does get me thinking about my life and how I can adapt to her story.
- I would like the question answered about how she feels about the situation more so, and what she wants to do so it's not so informative.
Sunday, March 15, 2009
Feature Story (750+)
Now, under new office, researchers and scientists are in extreme keenness, that President Barack Obama will vote in favor and support the senate bill that allows federal funding for stem cell research. This already introduced bill, was passed by both houses of congress when under the administration of former president George W. Bush. The bill will federal funding for embryonic stem cell research. When under the Bush administration, only 21 stem cell lines were eligible for funding, and now hundreds will be accessible for federal funding.
Embryonic stem cells, are undifferentiated cells that have been quarantined in early stages of growth. These cells have the ability and aptitude to be specialized into almost any function within the body and reproduce in large amounts.
Yes, the controversial debate arises of ethics, but now there are also other ways to collect these embryonic stem cells. For example, Dr. Gregg Poquette explains a way which is becoming increasingly popular. “Typically, couples donate excess embryos from fertility procedures to researchers. Researchers pull the 150 or so cells from inside one of these roughly 6-day-old embryos, destroying it, and grow the cells in a lab.”
In 2006, when former president Bush vetoed the bill, he quoted “taking of innocent human life of the hope of finding medical benefits for others,” in his defense that the bill was too ethically controversial. Bush took the side of religious groups, such as the Catholic Bishops.
Trying to fight against the federal funding, the National Right to Life Committee is arguing that it “opens door to human embryo farms…” and will add even more costs to harvesting cell lines. Rep. Joe Pitts, resonated his concerns for the current declining economy, and has called the additional costs “divisive.”
As did former president Bush, President Obama has placed restrictions on stem cell lines for receiving federal funding. But Obama’s limits aren’t as strict as Bush’s; Bush’s limitations only allowed 21 lines to pass. Although Obama is calling for “appropriate safeguards," allowing research "only when it is both scientifically worthy and responsibly conducted. We will develop strict guidelines, which we will rigorously enforce, because we cannot ever tolerate misuse or abuse." The National Institution of Health will facilitate guidelines that will not allow inappropriate compensation of embryo donors or informed consent.
In 1996, a law was passed that impedes federal funding of “research in which a human embryo or embryos are destroyed.” Some religious groups have taken on the argument in which that this law makes the research funding illegal. With this law, multiple presidents and major political leaders have interpreted this law to mean that federal funding could be used on the pre-existing stem cell lines. Although the bipartisan stem cell research bill is being voted on again (vetoed twice by Bush in both 2006 and 2007). The bills intent would be to flout the 1996 law.
We just want a fair shot at funding; we aren't asking for special treatment," says stem cell researcher George Daley of Children's Hospital Boston. The National Institute of Health has given an approximation of $938 million that it had given for stem cell grants, in 2008. Researchers will have to apply for funding money through the National Institute of Health. They can do this three times a year. Labs that are looking at cells that bear genetic markers for inherited diseases and have top-rated cells will be the most eligible for funding.
"I will immediately be able to have my NIH-funded graduate students get to work on important disease research they were barred from undertaking," says Harvard's Kevin Eggan. Most stem cell labs have been separated in half; private and federally funded. Before the bill was passed, it put would restrict researchers from using private equipment for research.
Harvard‘s Kevin Casey says that, "…we're going to have to work to catch up to the rest of the world." It will take a few years for the funds to make an effective result. The United Kingdom and Singapore have been giving federal funds to stem cell research since 2001.
By having more disease-specific stem cell lines to look at, researchers will be able to study and configure how these diseases instigated within the body. By finding out how it starts in the cellular level, it would give researchers on the exact genetic defects of the disease. It also give researchers the opportunity to culture the cells and screen them for their specific response to drugs that would help genetic defects. And lastly by having more stem cell lines to study from, it would give this era the name “regenerative medicine.” It would do this by creating immune system-friendly transplant organs; the Geron Corporation recently received Food and Drug Administration authorization to have stem cell research testing of nerve stem cell injections for patients with spinal cord injuries.
Embryonic stem cells, are undifferentiated cells that have been quarantined in early stages of growth. These cells have the ability and aptitude to be specialized into almost any function within the body and reproduce in large amounts.
Yes, the controversial debate arises of ethics, but now there are also other ways to collect these embryonic stem cells. For example, Dr. Gregg Poquette explains a way which is becoming increasingly popular. “Typically, couples donate excess embryos from fertility procedures to researchers. Researchers pull the 150 or so cells from inside one of these roughly 6-day-old embryos, destroying it, and grow the cells in a lab.”
In 2006, when former president Bush vetoed the bill, he quoted “taking of innocent human life of the hope of finding medical benefits for others,” in his defense that the bill was too ethically controversial. Bush took the side of religious groups, such as the Catholic Bishops.
Trying to fight against the federal funding, the National Right to Life Committee is arguing that it “opens door to human embryo farms…” and will add even more costs to harvesting cell lines. Rep. Joe Pitts, resonated his concerns for the current declining economy, and has called the additional costs “divisive.”
As did former president Bush, President Obama has placed restrictions on stem cell lines for receiving federal funding. But Obama’s limits aren’t as strict as Bush’s; Bush’s limitations only allowed 21 lines to pass. Although Obama is calling for “appropriate safeguards," allowing research "only when it is both scientifically worthy and responsibly conducted. We will develop strict guidelines, which we will rigorously enforce, because we cannot ever tolerate misuse or abuse." The National Institution of Health will facilitate guidelines that will not allow inappropriate compensation of embryo donors or informed consent.
In 1996, a law was passed that impedes federal funding of “research in which a human embryo or embryos are destroyed.” Some religious groups have taken on the argument in which that this law makes the research funding illegal. With this law, multiple presidents and major political leaders have interpreted this law to mean that federal funding could be used on the pre-existing stem cell lines. Although the bipartisan stem cell research bill is being voted on again (vetoed twice by Bush in both 2006 and 2007). The bills intent would be to flout the 1996 law.
We just want a fair shot at funding; we aren't asking for special treatment," says stem cell researcher George Daley of Children's Hospital Boston. The National Institute of Health has given an approximation of $938 million that it had given for stem cell grants, in 2008. Researchers will have to apply for funding money through the National Institute of Health. They can do this three times a year. Labs that are looking at cells that bear genetic markers for inherited diseases and have top-rated cells will be the most eligible for funding.
"I will immediately be able to have my NIH-funded graduate students get to work on important disease research they were barred from undertaking," says Harvard's Kevin Eggan. Most stem cell labs have been separated in half; private and federally funded. Before the bill was passed, it put would restrict researchers from using private equipment for research.
Harvard‘s Kevin Casey says that, "…we're going to have to work to catch up to the rest of the world." It will take a few years for the funds to make an effective result. The United Kingdom and Singapore have been giving federal funds to stem cell research since 2001.
By having more disease-specific stem cell lines to look at, researchers will be able to study and configure how these diseases instigated within the body. By finding out how it starts in the cellular level, it would give researchers on the exact genetic defects of the disease. It also give researchers the opportunity to culture the cells and screen them for their specific response to drugs that would help genetic defects. And lastly by having more stem cell lines to study from, it would give this era the name “regenerative medicine.” It would do this by creating immune system-friendly transplant organs; the Geron Corporation recently received Food and Drug Administration authorization to have stem cell research testing of nerve stem cell injections for patients with spinal cord injuries.
Tuesday, March 10, 2009
Feature Story (450+)
Now that there is new rein in the presidential office, researchers and scientists are in extreme keenness, in which that President Barack Obama will vote in favor and support the senate bill that allows federal funding for stem cell research. This already introduced bill was passed by both houses of congress when under the administration of former president George W. Bush. The bill will promote federal funding for embryonic stem cell research. When under the Bush administration, only 21 stem cell lines were eligible for funding, and now hundreds will be accessible for federal funding.
Embryonic stem cells are undifferentiated cells that have been quarantined in early stages of growth. These cells have the ability and aptitude to be specialized into almost any function within the body and reproduce in large amounts.
Yes, the controversial debate arises of ethics, but now there are also other ways to collect these embryonic stem cells. For example, Dr. Gregg Poquette explains a way which is becoming increasingly popular. “Typically, couples donate excess embryos from fertility procedures to researchers. Researchers pull the 150 or so cells from inside one of these roughly 6-day-old embryos, destroying it, and grow the cells in a lab.”
In 2006, when former president Bush vetoed the bill, he quoted “taking of innocent human life of the hope of finding medical benefits for others,” in his defense that the bill was too ethically controversial. Bush took the side of religious groups, such as the Catholic Bishops.
Trying to fight against the federal funding, the National Right to Life Committee is arguing that it “opens door to human embryo farms…” and will add even more costs to harvesting cell lines. Rep. Joe Pitts, exaggerated his concerns for the current declining economy, and has called the additional costs “divisive.”
As did former President Bush, President Obama has placed restrictions on stem cell lines for receiving federal funding. But Obama’s limits aren’t as strict as Bush’s; Bush’s limitations only allowed 21 lines to pass. Obama is calling for “appropriate safeguards, [allowing research] only when it is both scientifically worthy and responsibly conducted. We will develop strict guidelines, which we will rigorously enforce, because we cannot ever tolerate misuse or abuse." The National Institution of Health will facilitate guidelines that will not allow inappropriate compensation of embryo donors or informed consent.
In 1996, a law was passed that impedes federal funding of “research in which a human embryo or embryos are destroyed.” Some religious groups have taken on the argument in which that this law makes the research funding illegal. With this law, multiple presidents and major political leaders have interpreted this law to mean that federal funding could be used on the pre-existing stem cell lines. Although the bipartisan stem cell research bill is being voted on again (vetoed twice by Bush in both 2006 and 2007). The bills intent would be to flout the 1996 law.
Embryonic stem cells are undifferentiated cells that have been quarantined in early stages of growth. These cells have the ability and aptitude to be specialized into almost any function within the body and reproduce in large amounts.
Yes, the controversial debate arises of ethics, but now there are also other ways to collect these embryonic stem cells. For example, Dr. Gregg Poquette explains a way which is becoming increasingly popular. “Typically, couples donate excess embryos from fertility procedures to researchers. Researchers pull the 150 or so cells from inside one of these roughly 6-day-old embryos, destroying it, and grow the cells in a lab.”
In 2006, when former president Bush vetoed the bill, he quoted “taking of innocent human life of the hope of finding medical benefits for others,” in his defense that the bill was too ethically controversial. Bush took the side of religious groups, such as the Catholic Bishops.
Trying to fight against the federal funding, the National Right to Life Committee is arguing that it “opens door to human embryo farms…” and will add even more costs to harvesting cell lines. Rep. Joe Pitts, exaggerated his concerns for the current declining economy, and has called the additional costs “divisive.”
As did former President Bush, President Obama has placed restrictions on stem cell lines for receiving federal funding. But Obama’s limits aren’t as strict as Bush’s; Bush’s limitations only allowed 21 lines to pass. Obama is calling for “appropriate safeguards, [allowing research] only when it is both scientifically worthy and responsibly conducted. We will develop strict guidelines, which we will rigorously enforce, because we cannot ever tolerate misuse or abuse." The National Institution of Health will facilitate guidelines that will not allow inappropriate compensation of embryo donors or informed consent.
In 1996, a law was passed that impedes federal funding of “research in which a human embryo or embryos are destroyed.” Some religious groups have taken on the argument in which that this law makes the research funding illegal. With this law, multiple presidents and major political leaders have interpreted this law to mean that federal funding could be used on the pre-existing stem cell lines. Although the bipartisan stem cell research bill is being voted on again (vetoed twice by Bush in both 2006 and 2007). The bills intent would be to flout the 1996 law.
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